In today's society we are all weighed down by burdens that seem catastrophic in our eyes but petty in the rest of the world's eyes. In order to give the world a peek into my mind I created a Go World Video by starting with a good topic as a foundation, using diction that contributes to my message , and revising based on how I desired my audience to feel. The process seemed easy until I realized I had to produce similar results to those of an essay in only 30-65 words, so at that point I knew I had to start sturdy from the beginning.
With every great argument it is crucial to have a topic that we can distend on as we write, and the easiest way I figure to achieve it is by simply having passion for the topic. Therefor I chose to write about the one struggle that could have changed my whole life if I had handled it the the wrong way, which was, for me, my A's atrophying to, what felt like, obliteration. Because I hadn't ever experienced working hard in school and not seeing results, the solution of dropping out seemed to be pleading for me to down that path and I had no one to tell me not to. Because I was at a point when I was struggling so badly that my two options were dropping out or to keep pushing until I saw results, due to them being exact opposites I knew my message was very clear.
Much like my topic, my goal was to choose words to narrow in my argument. For example in my Go World Video I said, "School wasn't made for asinine people, people who are stupid like her. Oh, how asinine she was to think those silly thoughts." By saying this I was able to say that not pushing ourselves until we see success is foolish. Also by the use of repetition I allowed the reader to see an obvious transition in the way I thought about myself. I also simply utilized my personal vocabulary by choosing words with a really negative connotation or really positive connotation. A great example is defeat because if we are on the side of defeat we lost a battle, we lost a since of respect, and we lost a piece of our pride. Although it seems like I knew exactly where I was going with my writing process, I actually needed to make crucial revisions to evoke the audience's emotions.
When revising, my overall goal was to instill the emotions I felt while going through this struggle, into my audience members as they watched my video. During my struggle to improve my grades, I was depressed for a really long period of time, but slowly my hard work started to pay off. In order to create and terminate this feeling of depression in my audience under thirty seconds I revised the beginning to get really sad really quickly so the effects would happen sooner. While trying to achieve the above, I had to write, erase, substitute weak words with strong words, and repeat until I finally found the right words to express exactly how I felt once they were brought together. As for creating the relief part of my video, I did the opposite of the depression period by gradually working my way up to the "happily ever after." By doing this I caused my audience to see the good times coming, but being so anxious for it's arrival that they became almost desperate similarly to the way I felt right before everything worked out. It's hard to believe putting all that emotion in so little words is possible, but with a process anything is possible.
Because I had a goal in mind I was able to accomplish this by having a good buttress for my video, or argument, word choice that made my argument more specific, and revising so that I took my audience on the same journey of emotions that I went through.
You have some good thinking here about your process. This is important. Remember, writers make purposeful choices, and the more we think about the words, phrase, devices, etc that we use to craft meaning, the more confidence we will be as writers. Keep writing! 7
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