In today's society we are all weighed down by burdens that seem catastrophic in our eyes but petty in the rest of the world's eyes. In order to give the world a peek into my mind I created a Go World Video by starting with a good topic as a foundation, using diction that contributes to my message , and revising based on how I desired my audience to feel. The process seemed easy until I realized I had to produce similar results to those of an essay in only 30-65 words, so at that point I knew I had to start sturdy from the beginning.
With every great argument it is crucial to have a topic that we can distend on as we write, and the easiest way I figure to achieve it is by simply having passion for the topic. Therefor I chose to write about the one struggle that could have changed my whole life if I had handled it the the wrong way, which was, for me, my A's atrophying to, what felt like, obliteration. Because I hadn't ever experienced working hard in school and not seeing results, the solution of dropping out seemed to be pleading for me to down that path and I had no one to tell me not to. Because I was at a point when I was struggling so badly that my two options were dropping out or to keep pushing until I saw results, due to them being exact opposites I knew my message was very clear.
Much like my topic, my goal was to choose words to narrow in my argument. For example in my Go World Video I said, "School wasn't made for asinine people, people who are stupid like her. Oh, how asinine she was to think those silly thoughts." By saying this I was able to say that not pushing ourselves until we see success is foolish. Also by the use of repetition I allowed the reader to see an obvious transition in the way I thought about myself. I also simply utilized my personal vocabulary by choosing words with a really negative connotation or really positive connotation. A great example is defeat because if we are on the side of defeat we lost a battle, we lost a since of respect, and we lost a piece of our pride. Although it seems like I knew exactly where I was going with my writing process, I actually needed to make crucial revisions to evoke the audience's emotions.
When revising, my overall goal was to instill the emotions I felt while going through this struggle, into my audience members as they watched my video. During my struggle to improve my grades, I was depressed for a really long period of time, but slowly my hard work started to pay off. In order to create and terminate this feeling of depression in my audience under thirty seconds I revised the beginning to get really sad really quickly so the effects would happen sooner. While trying to achieve the above, I had to write, erase, substitute weak words with strong words, and repeat until I finally found the right words to express exactly how I felt once they were brought together. As for creating the relief part of my video, I did the opposite of the depression period by gradually working my way up to the "happily ever after." By doing this I caused my audience to see the good times coming, but being so anxious for it's arrival that they became almost desperate similarly to the way I felt right before everything worked out. It's hard to believe putting all that emotion in so little words is possible, but with a process anything is possible.
Because I had a goal in mind I was able to accomplish this by having a good buttress for my video, or argument, word choice that made my argument more specific, and revising so that I took my audience on the same journey of emotions that I went through.
